My recount is about My night in auckland city.
The clock ticked 5:45, as we wore our shoes to drive to the city.We stepped in the green 4WD
van and a strong voice yelled “Seat belts on.” I hurried to put my belt on as I heard the engine started to rumble. Vrmmmmmmm!!! roared the green van. We smoothly drove out onto the prickly road.I couldn’t wait to see Auckland City.
Me and my baby cousin got tired every minute we got closer but when we saw a glimmer of the lights and smelt the flipping patties in the pan We knew we were there. We gazed at huge
buildings as it shone back at us. We watched the honking buses pass by.
I put the window down and I felt the rushing wind. Just when I was going to wind up the window I saw people Ice Skating. I gazed as they glided on the ice like they were eagles flying.
The night got Dark and my cousin fell asleep. My Uncle drove back with out me noticing.
I was as tired as my baby cousin. So we arrived back at home. I hobbled holding my cousin
in my weak hand. I gave him to my aunty and hobbled on my bed closing my eyes slowly.
Hi Sam, nice work but you could have added an exclamation mark for 'a strong voice YELLED "seat belts on." Where is the exclamation mark.
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